ext_106638 ([identity profile] rustedinkwell.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] thestrangeaeons 2008-11-10 02:52 am (UTC)

:D :D :D! YAY!

This line:

She swore. The leaves were unimpressed.

Made me smile. It's a kind of dry wit and humor that fits in well with the story, and considering that the tree pretty much tripped her I like how it ties in with the feeling of nature trying to trick her.

I'm curious for more! You've got a good set up here and I like how you've introduced Juliet and given us a bit of info on her as well as showing her personality through her thoughts and actions (like her bike for example).

*cheers* Don't give up!

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